Jimmys plan of action

Based on the feedback I received last class, I will make a few changes while I start my draft before our conference. Since my first draft was an outline, there wasn't any grammatical errors. But I'm going to tighten up my intro and conclusion. The main thing I'm going to do is explain more of the characters so it's easier to follow the story as well as explain multiple differences. I'm definitely taking all the advice because it made sense and will help my essay. I was unsure about none of the feedback I received. I hope this is long-ish enough!